Show not tell.

W.A.L.T use show not tell in our writing to describe a moment in time. We were all given the same picture of a man covered in mud to base our stories off of. We were asked to create a moment in time describing what was going on. We also made a back story to draw emotions from. I am very happy with my work and hope you enjoy reading it. I found the fact that I had to write it over and over again difficult and my next steps would be to not use the same work in two consecutive sentences.

The man

The wind roars outside, the man stumbles into the old barn and collapses with exhaustion. His limbs become paralyzed with fear as the footsteps get louder. His heart leaps into his throat as he holds his breath. He was so exhausted and fatigued he couldn’t move a single finger. The dirt and  mud which has gathered on his cloths weighs him down, no chance of escape. But why would he want to escape? He was innocent.

The people came closer, boots marching in unison. All the man could see was black uniforms and guns. The air was full of the sound of men shouting commands, overpowering all other noise. Any light which had shone upon his was blocked out by the dark figures edging towards him. The strong rays coming out of the torch at the back of the room glistens and dances on the silver rifles. Why were they after him? He didn’t kill her!