Thursday 9 November 2017

The naughty kitten.

This week we have been practising using the correct punctuation. This is my story about a very naughty kitten. I hope you enjoy. I liked experimenting with different words and punctuation. I found getting things to rhyme and stay on topic difficult. Next time I would add more emotive language to let people know what Mia is feeling.



Let me tell the story of the little kitten Maya, or more important, the fact she’s a liar!

Maya was cruel to all her kitten friends, she blamed them for crimes, never making amends.

One day little Maya was hunting for trouble; she set fire to a cloth and it soon became rubble.

Her sister Mia was a good feline, but she was the one blamed for all Maya’s crimes.

A vase hit the floor “ it was Mia” she cried, as punishment for Mia she was locked out for the night.

Maya spotted a big bag of cat food, only one thing for certain would change her mood… the moment she scratched the bag and the cat food poured out, she was busted, taken and then locked out.

Her crimes caught up to her, she was cold and wide eyed, watching Mia sleeping peacefully, all cozy inside.

She decided to change her ways, then Maya became good for the rest of her days.

Everything was good and the cats lives happily ever after, until Maya played a prank which did not end in laughter...

1 comment:

  1. Hi Rheanna it's Lauren from Room 8,
    I really liked how you made the story rhyme. Maybe next time you can put a bit more detail or a picture but it was so cool and like I said before I really liked it!
    Look forward to seeing more work from you.

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